We had our first screening of “DANGER WORD” Saturday night, and are
over the moon. We primarily had cheers, and a couple of very sober,
excellent critiques. And spoke to Reggie Hudlin last night and HE also
had input to make. A few things arise from the current situation
clearly:
1) We have a winner. People love it, and a few sharp-eyed folks see ways for us to make it even better.
2) The primary critique is that IF there is a way to make it shorter while preserving the emotional “punch” we should do it.
3)
Award-winning Filmmaker Ayoka Chinzira suggested a very specific way to
tighten, and explained why. Part of her suggestion had to do with the
“visual poetry” of film, which is slightly different from the primarily
linear approach to story that my conscious mind prefers. There is a
“dream logic” to it, and I realized that I needed to SHUT UP that part
of my mind, and listen to what she was saying.
There is a time
for the conscious mind to work. And then there is a time to just let
yourself “feel” your way through the process.
This ability to
move back and forth between your conscious, direct goals and the
“texture” or interstitial emotional material that your audience actually
consumes. To look at it another way, plot is the “bones.” But…we
don’t eat bones. We eat meat. The meat is the emotions, and they are
non-linear, associative, illogical, and constantly blind-side you.
Plot
is important, but the emotions are what they must deliver. A seriously
advanced writer can write simply following images and feelings, and
deliver something that is exquisitely structured. We mere humans need
the bones. Goals are critical for the same reason, unless you are one
of those advanced, intuitive souls who just awaken in the morning,
follow your bliss, and find yourself fulfilling all obligations and
constantly improving and expressing yourself. I’ve met a few of these
people, and usually they were folks who DID plan and set goals at an
earlier time in their lives…but have integrated goals, values, and
dreams to the point where it is automatic.
The conscious in
the service to the unconscious. The logical in service to the
emotional. Total attention to the nuts and bolts of learning to ride a
bicycle in service to the inevitable “look Maw! No hands!” moment we
all seek.
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Another lesson to learn is that we need
the input of other minds. One of the most precious things about life
is constantly surrounding yourself with the best, most challenging and
perceptive people you can find. AND THEY MUST BE COURAGEOUS. I
watched Ayo’s face, and she was reluctant to speak. Why? Because the
rest of the room was raving about what they’d seen. But probably more
importantly, because SHE DIDN’T KNOW HOW WE WOULD REACT.
Many
artists SAY they want brutal feedback, but they can’t actually handle
it. They don’t have enough genuine confidence in themselves to be able
to hear that something isn’t perfect.
A mature human being
doesn’t want to “think” they are good. They want to actually BE good.
The best they can be. And that means they must accept criticism without
expanding it to a global condemnation. (Can’t leap to: “it all
sucks!” This is childish and indicative of binary thinking. I see
this in political arguments: criticize anything about America, and you
are saying “America is the worst country in the world.” Oh, please.)
I
know I have blind spots in every area of performance. If I don’t get
feedback from people who love me ruthlessly, I will never be the artist I
can be. I cannot solicit critique and simultaneously protect my
ego. I have to associate with the dream of being my best, not the
illusion that I already am.
It is a delicate balance, indeed.
Namaste,
Steve
Tuesday, September 24, 2013
First feedback on DANGER WORD
Posted by Steven Barnes at 4:54 AM
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3 comments:
Glad to hear this. I just got my Danger Word T-shirt!
Got mine in the mail yesterday, Steve. I'll wear it at Orycon.
Much appreciate your blog post
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